Tuesday, March 19, 2013

And This Month's Non-Existent Editing Award Goes To....

... this little gem I found on Yahoo:

"Alt-folk singer Michelle Shocked incited a mass walk-out during her concert Sunday after launching into an anti-gay-marriage diatribe that incited a mass walkout, Yahoo! reports."

Can I just scream at the screen now?
I have 7th graders who can and do write better than this.


  1. I'm not an English teacher, but I can still see the redundancy there.

    So, let me see if I'm reading this right. There were two mass walk-outs, right? One after the diatribe, and then another mass walk-out caused by the first walk-out that was caused by the diatribe. No?

    Whew, I got a headache now. Too many mass walk-outs.

    1. This is what happens when people don't bother to read what they've written.

    2. That's why I always read my posts after I publish them, and then go back and make corrections.